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Old 05-07-2009, 06:35 PM
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Hey Karl I like your sales pages and the format is good but I'd say more about what qualifies you as a self-esteem expert than just mentioning you've authored many articles. Have you suffered from low self-esteem yourself? If so write about that, give more personal insight. If you have any degrees or training mention that.

Maybe you could relate more to your reader. What is it that really distubs them, reach down and really connect with their pain. Some more diaglog along those lines would be good.

Otherwise, I think you're on the right track

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I've updated my salespage as you say Elizabeth and here is the result, please comment on the changed page:

Check the old page

Check the new page

Especially:

Is it more convincing?
Will it get read?
Does it relate to the reader more?

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Thanks for your comments janne and phardy. Care to go into a bit more detail and tell me what you like/dont like or what should be changed?
I could see why you would want long copy especially if you are not an expert already in your field, by creating the long copy whether anyone likes it or not is more about selling yourself and establishing a relationship with the people before they get to the opt in box or order button...

I thought it looked great Karl!


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Ron,

As I read your posts...
Makes me want to put in coins next to your thoughts.
Always good.

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I agree.. the age of video... miss the video!
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