Have created sales page myself and trying to figure out what to change/ which page better.

When I get a bit more traffic I will test .

There are two pages, really appreciate your comments and suggestions:

Normal Page:

Page I created for Clickbank affiliates

(50% commission if anyone wants to sell the e-book)

Thanks for your help...

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I like the second page created for Clickbank affiliates as it seems to hold my attention better. It may be that it makes me ask myself a question.

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Nice job! I like your sale pages, especially the second one. Thank you for useful advice

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Thanks for your comments janne and phardy. Care to go into a bit more detail and tell me what you like/dont like or what should be changed?

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Your pages are ok. since it is for selling, it May add some value if you add a video to it.

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The only way your going to know for sure is by testing. Sales letters should be in constant test mode. You don't need a ton of traffic to test, you could start out with just a couple things.

First and most important is the headline, that should be the first thing tested, with at least a couple variations. Then they say the next best to test is the call to action section.

Seems a little short to me. Call to action looks pretty weak. Could beef up the urgency. Gotta give them reasons to order right now. Maybe have a could down number, show they better order before they are gone.

Your bullet points tend to push features, when they should be pushing benefits, or the hot buttons. For example, one bullet says: "Improve your relationships". To weak, you need to instead tell them what it will do for them if they improved their relationships, like, "You'll have more friends". That's kinds short, but think you get the point. You could probably even break up that one bullet point into several, such as improve relationships with friends, family, lovers, ect. And tell what they will get out of each one of them. Am I making any sense? Push the sizzle, not the steak

I personally would lose the text and link: "If you are new to ordering online click here for more info.". First your distracting them and give them a way out, another page to go to, a traffic leak. I also wouldn't explain how easy it is to get a refund. Of course you'd give them a refund if they asked for it, but I wouldn't be making it so easy. One big problem with Clickbank, it's to easy to get a refund.

Just some ideas

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I've never been big on sales letters its very DM. I tend to be turned off, they seem so wordy. I find that bulleted lists of benefits are more effective than lots of copy.

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That type of sale letter has been proven many times over for years. It's not that some one "thought" it would work, it's was testing that proved it. Proven by people with many more years of selling and many more sales under their belt than any of us here.

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Ron thanks I'm gonna take your thoughts into consideration....

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Ok I've updated the sales page again can you please look and tell me what you think of the changes?

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